Winter

Alright, before I start this, I would like for anyone reading this to critique it. I really want to make sure it is good, before I do something serious with it (i.e., get it mounted and spend money making it look good, etc.). So, if everyone could just tell me anything that he or she thinks is wrong with it, I would really appreciate it.

Here goes.

Winter


Twas winter when we lost you
Three days from the holiday you loved the most
And all I could think about on My "Black Tuesday"
Was the feasting, fun and festivities that you always used to host.

This Christmas Eve was so empty
Without you in the center
Every moment of the day, I thought of you
Heard your voice, smelled your scent, felt your warmth block out the chill of winter

I think back in time, remembering
When you performed "emergency surgery" on my paper dolls
The "milkman", the olsen twins, and Dairy Queen
The picnics we often took out to Nocculala Falls

You took Natalie and I to all the Disney cartoons
All the CiCi's Pizza and fun cooking
I remember the homemade noodles I got to press
And the chocolate I snuck when you weren't looking

And the last time I saw you plays over and over
Me, you, Amber and Natalie stayed up talking all night
We shopped, we played, we had a ball
We made your famous lasagna and ate every bite

All these things I have to remember
And I think of them with a smile,
Because when we are crying and mourning you
You'll be watching over us all the while