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Date: 12/7/2004 8:51:00 PM
From Authorid: 32659
Do your own homework. ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 8:54:00 PM ( From Author )
From Authorid: 16916
I have done it..I am looking for advice..sheesh! ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:04:00 PM ( Admin-FA )
It looks good to me, Stina. ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:07:00 PM
From Authorid: 3125
I think you did a real good job on it. ((Hugs)) ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:09:00 PM ( From Author )
From Authorid: 16916
Thanks Chatmin FA (Fallin Angel I think?) And Rusure ![]() ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:31:00 PM
From Authorid: 12341
Looks good to me. My youngest daughter is in her first year of college and often asks me to read over her papers. She works and has little ones to take care of and spends every spare moment on her homework. I understand exactly where you are coming from. This is well written, in my opinion. ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:33:00 PM ( From Author )
From Authorid: 16916
Thanks Brenda..you're right. I go to schoo fulltime and I work between part and full time. Its all I can do to spit out a paper at midnight the day before my paper is do! Thanks for your help! ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 9:34:00 PM ( From Author )
From Authorid: 16916
lol see I am tired! school* DUE!* LOL ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 10:19:00 PM
From Authorid: 20750
That is awesome to me! Scrabble Kid show some manners! Geeze! ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 11:31:00 PM
From Authorid: 62915
2nd line. I think you may need a comma after cuba gooding jr. "The football coach, played by Ed Harris the supporting actor, invites Radio to join his family at the climax of the film when Radio's mother died." - do you need to have the words "the supporting actor" here? To me this line doesn't flow very well. The main character played by Cuba Gooding Jr. was mentally challenged. You have already stated this.. do you need to have it? if so maybe you could reword it a little? In what you have written you essentially have all the info you need. However it could flow better \if you joined some of your sentences together. To me it seems to be very choppy as you only have short sentences. I may be too late to help but PM me and i will help you some more if you want me to ![]() ![]() |
Date: 12/7/2004 11:34:00 PM
From Authorid: 62915
And i think there is nothing wrong with askign for assistance. You have obvioulsy written it and everyone needs help proofreading and making sure that other people know what you are trying to say ![]() ![]() |
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