Date: 11/6/2013 4:48:00 PM
From Authorid: 42945
Nicely written but the words are sad....  |
Date: 11/6/2013 10:02:00 PM
From Authorid: 42703
beautiful, and sad. nice work!  |
Date: 11/8/2013 9:37:00 AM
From Authorid: 8024
excellent..
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Date: 11/10/2013 12:17:00 AM
From Authorid: 998
Oh my goodness, this is so beautiful Regi. It's beauty is in a somber haunting way, but this poem will stay with me for days to come, I'm sure. I've never heard the term .. 'I'm lost within you', but it fits so many people and in so many ways.
Your last 4 lines are just heartbreaking. I hope the love of your life never makes you ask for him to stay .. he better want, desire, need to stay with you every minute. If he doesn't, there is a short 5 letter word to describe him ... i-d-i-o-t. I'm speaking metaphorically, of course. Luv ya girl !!!   |
Date: 11/10/2013 7:50:00 AM ( From Author )
From Authorid: 27705
Thanks guys  glad you all like the poem. I actually wrote it based on something a friend is going through.  |
Date: 11/12/2013 5:26:00 AM
From Authorid: 51876
Very Good alternative rhythm phrasing. Keep writing.  |
Date: 12/6/2013 11:46:00 AM
From Authorid: 49910
Love every little line of this! Keep writing!  |
